Comments on: The Occasioned Meal

By: Donna Vorreyer

Donna Vorreyer — Mon, 30 Nov 2009 01:59:04 +0000

The voices are very warm and natural and interrupted thoughts- just like a family conversation. It sounds like you’re not quite sure if you like it – I think it works.

By: angie

angie — Sun, 29 Nov 2009 19:34:53 +0000

I love the prosey-bits floating in and interrupting, just like real life around the kitchen table. and just like real life: the sadness underlying it all.
beautifully done.

By: Paul Oakley

Paul Oakley — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 20:17:51 +0000

I love the way this poem runs through the sequence of what it wasn’t about, each a precious detail in its own right. But it was thin giblet gravy that held the meaningful, poignant details of this family gathering. Nicely done.

By: Elizabeth Enslin

Elizabeth Enslin — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 20:10:16 +0000

I especially like the dialogue in this, how you capture the cadence of voices. And the giblet ending is superb (I also hate giblets, so that part hit me in a very visceral way).

By: Deb

Deb — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 01:23:39 +0000

I should try some fiction, but it is a little beyond my skills. Thanks for the wishes.

By: Deb

Deb — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 01:23:07 +0000

It’s a powerful image, those dear old ladies in their housecoats. Thanks!

By: Deb

Deb — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 01:22:24 +0000

Thanks, Cynthia … did you pretend to eat any of it? :-)

By: Deb

Deb — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 01:21:51 +0000

I’m glad that last unwinding was okay for you. I was afraid it was too explicit.

By: Deb

Deb — Sat, 28 Nov 2009 01:21:12 +0000

Good perspective, Ana, on distance, though these are kin for whom moving from Texas to Arizona and back was momentous. =)

By: Michelle Johnson

Michelle Johnson — Fri, 27 Nov 2009 21:17:11 +0000

love the mixture of food and family embodied in this poem. you always puts bits of yourself into whatever you’re writing. enjoyed the read. have a great day/ weekend.